....The walls seemed to be rippling like water as they enclosed Claire. Claire stopped 5 yards from the door, gasping for breath as she watched in awe and terror as the walls seemed to undulate like they were liquid. The walls suddenly stopped 5 feet away from her. Out of the wall came a hand. Claire screamed in terror. The had from the wall reached out as if to grab Claire and drag her in to the wall with it. As the hand groped at her, she backed up, cowering.
"This can't be happening. This can't be happening!" Claire repeated to herself, terrified.
As she backed up to the other wall, another hand grabbed her back. She flailed about trying to resist the hand's iron grip as it pulled her closer and closer to the wall. It was too late she was pulled all the way into the wall which seemed to be made of a liquid-like substance. She took one last breath before she was completely engulfed. She felt the liquid like substance everywhere as she accepted her fate. She finally ran out of air and she sunk into darkness.
EDIT: Next week I will post a revised, better version of the WHOLE story
Okay. PLEASE dont make her be dead. GREAT STORY though. I really like the suspense!
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P.S. What happens to Mark?
Very cool...is this going to be fantasy then? Will she go to another world? I'm guessing she's not dead (Liesl :) ) or else she wouldn't be one of the main characters? When I'm reading this, I long for longer, more complex sentences interspersed with the shorter ones. I love the word undulate though!
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