Salty air
Shovels, motes, and castles
grains of sand squeeze between toes
waves wash them clean
heels sink deeper
children yelling, cheering having fun
happiness surrounds me
I smile
Shovels, motes, and castles
grains of sand squeeze between toes
waves wash them clean
heels sink deeper
children yelling, cheering having fun
happiness surrounds me
I smile
Who wrote this?
ReplyDeletePhoebe Did. SOrry i forgot to say that :P whoops:)
ReplyDeleteYou do a good job of highlighting all of the BEST parts of the beach. I think if you were to expand it a little you should go more into detail about how you feel and add more sensory images. Good job! -Liz
ReplyDeleteI feel like Liz is right. I think you should highlight all of the WORST parts of the beach in a revised edition. Like obese, hairy guys that dribble ice cream all over their chest or tracking sand into the car (which I hate).
ReplyDeletemmhhhmmm.. okay Noa. Will do! :) chubby harry guys eating ice cream, here i come!
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