Tuesday, October 2, 2012

The Writer- Liesl


I quicken my stride and hear my footsteps against the linoleum, sharp and brisk. I come to the cafeteria and find it empty, except for a redhead girl sitting at one of the tables alone, bent over a piece of paper writing intently.

“Darn it,” I think. This is my first week at Holderness Central School and I’ve missed lunch. I moved here a month earlier and enrolled late, so have spent the past twenty minutes trying to get organized and find the lunchroom. My stomach growls hungrily and I sigh. It was going to be a long day. Startled, the girl turns around, her red hair flying and a blue pen gripped in her right hand.

“Um, hi…” I venture. God. What a stupid thing to say, couldn’t I have managed something more? How lame am I?

“Hi” she says, “I don’t think I’ve seen you before, are you new?” she asks curiously

“Uh… yeah. I just enrolled last week; I’m in the 7th grade. My name’s Jessie” I stand there awkwardly as she runs her eyes up and down my petite, 4’ 11” frame, brown hair, and totally normal, boring outfit.

“Hey, that’s cool! There are two girls in the eighth grade with me named Jessie! Well, Jessica really, but neither of them like that name, so they go by Jessie. Geez, it’s gonna get pretty confusing around here…, Do you need anything? You look sort of lost. I’m Elizabeth by the way.” She seems genuine, not at all like the other girls who I met today, the ones who were trying to brainwash me into joining their petty clique.

“Err, yeah. I am confus- I mean, yeah, I am lost. I don’t know my way around, and now I missed lunch because I couldn’t find the lunchroom.” Oh. My. God. Could I have screwed up any worse?

“Well, I don’t know how you feel about spaghetti, but that was what was for lunch today, and I don’t like it, so you can it” she motions for me to come sit down next to her and pushes her untouched lunch tray to me. “It’s a little cold, but it should be better than nothing.” She clicks her pen shut and tosses it down on top of a journal decorated with a cupcake and some other random doodles.

“What were you writing?” I ask as I devour the cold, congealed noodles, that actually weren’t half bad.

“Oh. Just a poem for my writing class. You can read it if you want, but it still needs work” Elizabeth pushed the paper covered in notes to me, “It’s this part right here,” I glance down at the paper and read.

 

Time slips between our fingers

Like water in cupped hands

Trying to stop it

Is like trying to stop the tide

And no matter how much you want to

No matter how much you pray

Children will grow up

The elderly will die

We will drown ourselves in pools of tears

Entire nations vanish

In the minute of a god

Yet time keeps pushing

On

The planets spin

The earth revolves

The stars trace

Their never ending passage across the sky

And time keeps pushing

On.

 

When I finish I am stunned “Wow,” I say “I mean, wow, that’s really good, I love to write, but I can’t do anything that good!”

“You really think so?” Elizabeth searches my face for any sign of falsehood. “I still think it needs work.” She suddenly glances at the clock. “Crud, 11:50. Time for class.” She packs up her stuff in a hurry and dashes out the pair of metal doors. I look down at the remains of my lunch, and wonder if I have found a new friend.

 

 

5 comments:

  1. This is a great beginning to your story. Are you planning on expanding it to a full story? If you are, I think this is a good start. I like the way you kind of show the relationship forming between the two. I also like the name ;) -Elizabeth

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    1. I dont think that I am going to continue with this, it was just an idea that I wanted to write about. And the name, actually, because my name is German, is the English translation of my name! :)
      Liesl

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  2. I think that you should continue this actually. It would make for a great story. Having moved around to many different schools in my life, I can relate to all of the emotions your character has. I really like this story and I think you should definitely work on this more.

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  3. I agree with Noa. Continuing this would turn out well! I think you are doing wonderful and I Like how you put a poem inside your other writing! Very unusual... I like it!
    Phoebe

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  4. Geeze guys! I really dont think I want to continue this and for one reason. I am out of ideas. When I came up with this, I didn't think about continuing it and so had no ideas that could make it keep going! If one of you wants though, I give you copyright permission to continute it :)

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