How far do I have to go
to find out who I am?
how far am I willing to go?
What can I, a normal
(sort of) teen
from a tiny town
in a tiny state
do in the way of self-findoutishmenship,
or whatever?
Do I travel the world?
I can’t though.
I’m too young,
and I don’t have the money
It would be like
trying to run a marathon
up to my knees in quicksand.
maybe in another twenty-five years or something.
Do I play twenty questions with myself?
Even though I feel like
I don’t know myself well enough
to even begin
to know where to start?
What do I like?
er.. reading and nature, stuff like that
What do I feel strongly about?
What do I want?
I want the world to be this way forever
Who do I love?
Who am I?
I have a feeling that
I am going to find out soon.
It’s like that poet guy William Thompson said:
“When we come to an edge,
we come to a frontier that tells us
we are now about to become more
than we ever have been before”
And I think I have reached that edge
I’m guessing I have reached that frontier
and I am going to take the leap of faith
I am going to jump
fly into oblivion
and find out
Who
I
am
Liesl,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you make this sound like it is written by a teen, and you make it clear who your audience is and you have found ways to relate to that audience. I love how you added a quote in there too-- it adds a nice touch to the whole poem. :)
-Lindsay
I am enjoying watching the revisions of this move along!
ReplyDeleteI like how the serious tone is mellowed out by the lines such as "maybe in another twenty-five years or something."
ReplyDeleteI agree with the above comments. You started out with a good poem. You then revised it and made it a great poem. Now it's a great poem with a voice. You really add character to it while keeping it serious and thoughtful. This has come a long way. Hope to see it published! :)-Liz
ReplyDeleteI agree with every single one of these comments! Liesl, I love reading your writing because it helps me improve on my writing. Agreeing with Mrs. Miller, I saw the before version or this. Your writing is getting better and better and better! Keep it up:)
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