they are still here.
In my dreams,
they are still with me.
In my dreams
they still walk by my side.
In dreams,
I am happy
with the ones I love.
In dreams,
they comfort me
with words of hope
and words of joy.
Then stark reality
comes crashing down,
and I have to lose them
all
over
again.
*Sorry it took me so long to post this, I had it written on Thursday, but didn't get around to posting it until this morning!
I think this poem is really good! It really sets a mood. This poem leaves you asking some questions~ and I think that if you add some strong verbs than it will be even more wonderful!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Phoebe. Are the people your character is with in the dreams supposed to be the character's dead family?
ReplyDeleteMaybe add some adjectives and play with line breaks and see what you come up with?... -Liz
ReplyDeleteI'm craving longer lines that add to the poem & make the repetition more emphatic.
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