The paper slides onto my desk.
with my arms shaking, I pick up my pencil.
All the numbers and letters glare up at me mocking my fright.
I slowly right my name,
looking around to make sure no one can see how much I am sweating.
The first question.
I read it over and over again, hoping it will magically turn into the answer.
I have no idea.
Meanwhile, I look at my neighbor, rapidly writing things down.
I try to pass time by looking around the room for resources.
Eh-em.
I turn my head to see her giving me the look that all teachers have mastered.
Without thinking, I write down random doodles to make it look like I know what I'm doing.
The silence; so loud.
Tick-tock engraves it's rhythm into my brain.
Only 5 minutes left. All I need is to buckle down and think.
But with 5 minutes left?
No way I'm going to finish!
All I need is time.
Phoebe-
ReplyDeleteThis is good, but what kind of test are you taking here? Math? The only thing that I can suggest, okay, two things, are, one, play with your line breaks (you have some really long lines here) and two, possibly consider turning this into... not a poem. I can't think of the word. Some of your lines are so long that they run on. Just an idea
Liesl
Phoebe...
ReplyDeleteI like this-- I can totally relate!!
I think you could make this prose writing. But I really think it would be a fun poem to revise! Maybe throw some rhymes in there, or something.. :)
--Lindsay
I agree with Liesl and Lindsay. This is a great start. I like the topic since it's so easy to relate to. I love the line " Tick-tock engraves it's rhythm into my brain." I'd say you just need to play like line breaks and go through and see what words you can take out. -Elizabeth
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem because it is very relatable. I feel the same way sometimes on tests! I agree that you could make it prose though.
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