He dreams about a fantasy world
In this world there are many
Glorious citadels atop stunning cliffs
The sun shines bright upon these acropolises
He dreams that he is a knight
A glorious soldier of the divine
His adventures told in fabulous fables
He is the last bulwark for his kingdom
He dreams that he fights malevolent creatures
That raze the fantasy kingdom
He slays these creatures
An unstoppable juggernaut of the righteous
He dreams that he helps the begrimed children
And that he save damsels in distress
He is the most acclaimed knight in the kingdom
A hero of heroes
But of course this is only a dream
He snaps back to reality
To the bullies who call him a nerd
to the disparaging words and the stress
Things that he cannot escape or defeat with his imaginary sword
He wishes he could
just
go
back.
Noa--
ReplyDeleteYou have amazing vocabulary in this poem. The verbs and adjectives are so descriptive and precise! Awesome poem, very clear.
--Lindsay
I agree with Lindsay...I love your word choice and phrasing. I also really like the whole topic you came up with. I think with some revising and editing this would be a good one to send out. Keep it up! -Liz
ReplyDeleteDitto. However, some of your phrases are a bit cliche, like "But of course this is only a dream/ He snaps back to reality" and "He dreams about a fantasy world" and I think that if you fixed them, and ebuded them with some of the great vocabulary that you use in the rest of your poem, you could blow the roof off of this one. I agree with Lindsay in that it would be a great one to send out.
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