She
staggered into the dark house, cold and tired, but happier than she had been in
a very, very long time. She had just come back from a night out with her best
friends, shopping, going out to dinner, and then going to see a movie. Behind
her, her best friend’s bright red car pulled out of the driveway and down the
suburban Detroit street. Closing the door behind her, Aina
flipped on the entryway lights. Only then did it hit her that something
was off.
Her parents had said that they
would be home, that they were just going to catch up on some work for their
office. They were both… well… Aina didn’t exactly know. They were always busy,
travelling or something, and when Aina tried to ask them questions about their
work, they always suddenly became distracted and bustled off. Aina had
eventually learned not to ask questions.
Tonight, all the lights in the
house were off, except for the porch light, which she had left on when she
left. The house was dark and silent.
“Mom? Dad? Where are you guys?” I
walked up the dark stairs, switching all of the lights on as I went. I rounded
the corner into their office, and a scene of devastation met my eyes.
This is good but I'm really confused...the whole time you describe the girl getting back home. But then you switch to first person. Does the point of view change or something?
ReplyDeleteMmmm... yeah. Good point. I will work on that.
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