Monday, October 22, 2012

Clouds-Elizabeth



Tessie dashes through the
grassy field,
me chasing after her.
I trip and fall,
gently into a bed of pale purple flowers.
I lie back laughing as
she trots over and sniffs me
and takes off through the meadow.

I stay,
gazing at the sky.
The sun's rays, grand and bright, peeks through the clouds,
providing warmth to my face.
A slight breeze rustles my hair just as
the sun emerges
from behind a cloud.
I close my eyes, enjoying this moment.
This moment is mine,
mine to remember.
I let the wind take me on a journey,
my imagination spinning out of control.
I zoom through the sky, laughing as Tessie leaps
to catch up to me.
Together, we fly through time, smiles on our faces.

As the wind settles down, 
we begin to fall through the clouds,
falling and falling. 
We hit the ground, the pale purple flower covered ground
and lie there.

I wake up just as a large puffy white cloud
engulfs the sun, taking away my source of warmth,
and happiness.
I lie there, Tessie by my side
and we dream.



Really random thing I did that combines all of my writing from the beginning of class...


3 comments:

  1. I really like all of the descriptive detail. It really paints a picture in my mind. You might want to specify who Tessie is though. Also I feel like this could definitely be prose instead of poetry.

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  2. Ok ya I didn't really realize that I didn't clarify that Tessie is my dog until after I posted it so if I decide to bring this further I will do that.

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  3. I agree with Noa! Its great desciptve. But i forgot who Tessie was and at first I thought it was your friend and then it said she sniffs me and I got a little confused. But then I figured it out so I also think that you should clarify who Tessie is.
    -Phoebe

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